I like most of it jshoer! Your line is generally pretty good especially for ink and it's got good clarity so everything is easily identifiable. I like your labelling too with its thin font and good placement!
MY own personal bug would be the colours. I've only produced B&W maps so far so feel free to ignore me if you wish, but I don't particularly like your colour palette. I think the sand around the river is too strong (maybe?) or at least (i my mind) doesn't work with the red regions or the lighter sandy colour. Like I said, my experience with colour is pretty limited, so feel free to ignore that.
I do like the texture you got from the pencils though and it works very well with the faux-torn border you've got going!