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Thread: Mar/April '17 Lite Challenge: The Thieves of Geiros

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    Wonderful! Splendid!

    I think you might be missing an 's' from the end of the word 'get' in line 8 of the story?

    (sorry - I'm in editing mode again!)

    Looking forward to an excellent swashbuckling tale of heroism, betrayal and success against all the odds with a final twist at the end

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    @GLS thank you very much .. and yes, tarot card wise they don't get much more ominus than that

    @mouse: lol.. yes, actually just edited that, wrote that a bit fast but since english is not my first language I miss something here and there - my biggest problem is writing in the same time (present/past) throughout my writing .. and thanks for the kind words - I've gone a bit astray from the big expensive books and straight to best selling popular literature
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    Your English is better than a lot of English born writers (myself included)! I was regarding it as a simple typo

    I think its better than a big shiny book now. Its become a big shiny adventure

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    Another great and atmospheric cover. This contest may have started slow, but it's got a hell of a lot of good entires now.

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    Since Mouse started the editing process there are 2 more to fix.
    In line 5 it should read "he sets OFF on the journey"
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    in line 7 it should either be " a new friend is not" or "new friends ARE not"

    On the other hand, the bookcover is looking AMAZING!!!!

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    There you go, you see - told you my English wasn't really all that excellent. I miss all the little words by putting them in in my mind as I read what's actually there

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    This is looking great. I like the knife stuck into the map.
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    Excellent! Glad to see you back, Tilt .
    Oh, and I love this cryptic signature logo .

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    Thanks Falconius much appreciated

    Thanks Bogie, I'll make sure to edit those

    Hehe Mouse - I know what you mean.

    Thanks ChickPea, I thought the knife would be cool - and I can imagine the poor mapmaker wanting to protest and yet - maybe not to the guy with the knife anyway

    Thanks Ilanthar, its good to be back. Actually I liked the idea for this book so much that I'm now sketching the map for Geiros City and half thinking to write the book lol
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    Don't 'half think' it. Do it

    (And I'm the worst offender as far as that goes!)

    Procrastination is like an incurable disease that only gets worse as you get older - and I know about these things because I'm older than you
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