February 2019 Challenge: Earth Reboot, New Eden

[bkh1914]

A few more corrections:
...whose members are called 'Asuras' emerged. (eliminate the has)


There are multiple ways to write this passage. This one flows better for me:
...a major threat due to competition for land and resources, and their dangerous ideology that opposes our deeds. This may lead to terrorism and war.

Similarly:
...drugs made from a giant flower found in the forests around the Turquoise Gulf on the western coast.

[Climatic adaptation] ...mainly because the local fauna frequently damage the floating acclamation grid devices.

[rdanhenry]

"quicly" should be "quickly"
While not strictly wrong as it is, putting "quickly" before, rather than after, "gained" would be standard word order.

[- JO -]

It is both beautiful and exciting.
The story you let us understand through the technical data is very inspiring. Its realism is underlined by the illustrations: portrait, animals, etc.
It reminds me of Leo's comics: Aldebaran, Betelgeuse, etc. but with some clues that suggest that this planet would be the earth...
I really enjoyed the trip you offered us, when we take the time to read all the details and study the very beautiful map.

Congratulations!

[Ilanthar]

@bkh1914 & rdanhenry : thanks a lot guys, much better now ! Corrections done.

@ - JO - : Thanks ! I'm very glad you like it. And I do enjoy that comparison!!

Probably the final version.
### Latest WIP ###
New Eden.jpg

[Voolf]

Splendid. This is one in my 3 top already.

The map itself it's just so inreadibly well crafted. And then the whole illustrations and informations around just add to this amaizing piece.

Congratz on this Ilanthar.

[Diamond]

I don't know what to say. I think this is something that could be a centerpiece in a movie - it just looks damn good.

[J.Edward]

Love it. This looks brilliant, Ilanthar

[Ilanthar]

Thanks a lot guys, I'm truly flattered !

[Domino44]

I really feel like a spy looking at this... Like I'm about to jump out of a helicopter and caring out the mission myself... It's a cool feeling. Anyway, just amazing work!

[aeshnidae]

Atlas award for best sci-fi map next year...